高校问答学园都市的佐天御坂:修改ENGLISH 短文
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I had many friends in my class.And let me tell you the one's.
His name is Xu Xiaolong,he has short straight hair.He is medium height and medium build.His lip is too thick.His excellent marks.teachers like him,some students like him,too.
He is our geography deputy,in last term,he is awarded a certificate of merit and schoolarship!In our class,He was best!
His name is Xu Xiaolong,he has short straight hair.He is medium height and medium build.His lip is too thick.His excellent marks.teachers like him,some students like him,too.
He is our geography deputy,in last term,he is awarded a certificate of merit and schoolarship!In our class,He was best!
I have many friends in my class. let me introduce one of them to you.
His name is Xu Xiaolong,he has short straight hair.He is medium height and medium build.His lip is too thick.teachers like him for his excellent marks.,some students like him,too.
He is our geography deputy,in last term,he is awarded a certificate of merit and schoolarship!In our class,He was the best!
时态混乱,第一个HAD可以改成HAVE.
然后......ONE'S 改成ONE 或者ONE'S STORY
多用连词,不要老用"HE IS....."
有事先走了,还是请其他同志帮你改吧~
"in my class"提前的话会更符合英文习惯，全文都用一般现在时会更好
附修改句
His lip is quite thick.
His excellent mark makes our teacher like him .As well as some students.