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Is chatting a waste of time ？
Is chatting a waste of time? Different people have different opinions on(1) it. I don’t think chatting is a waste of time. There(2) points can support my opinion.
First, living in the society, we have to communicate with others. Otherwise, we shall(3) be apart(4) from others, then(5) , we will be lonely. Such as(6) a bird, if only living(7) in the forest with others, it will be happy.
Second, from chatting, we can make friends with others. We can exchange information with them, share our happiness or sadness, and also make the people cared(8) about us happy(9). Once(10) you are unhappy, if you can chat with someone and she help(11) you solve(12) the problem, then, you will be happier(13).
Third, nowadays, people around the world are all very busy, so we should try to release ourselves, chatting is one of these(14) ways. Maybe just a joke, (15)can lead us(16) from the heavy stress of work.
As what I said above, I don’t think chatting is a waste of time. We should only(17) enjoy it but not consider(18) it as(19) a waste of time.

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去掉happy (10) when (11) helps (12) to solve (13) 从unhappy到happy再到happier，所以改成happy (14) the (15) 去掉逗号 (16) lead us改成set people free，前面是people，后面是us，角色转换太多容易让读者有乱的感觉 (17) 去掉only (18) but not consider改成instead of considering (19) 去掉as

正在闲谈一个时间的废物 ?
正在闲谈一个时间的废物? 不同的人在它上有不同的意见。 我不想闲谈是一个时间的废物。 在那里点能支援我的意见。
首先, 住在社会, 我们必须与其它沟通。 以别的方式, 我们将是除了其它之外，然后，我们将会是孤单的。如此的如一只鸟, 如果唯一的住在森林和其它，它将会很快乐。
其次，从闲谈，我们能和其它作朋友。 我们能和他们交换数据,分享我们的快乐或者悲哀, 以及使人关心我们快乐。 一经你是不快乐的,如果你们能闲谈，然后,某人和她帮助你们解决问题,你将会比较快乐。
第三, 时下，全球的人全部非常忙碌，因此，我们应该试着释放我们自己,闲谈是这些方法之一。 也许只是，一个笑话,能从工作的重压迫力带领我们。
如我说的上方, 我不想闲谈是一个时间的废物。 我们应该只享受它但是不把它视为一个时间的废物。

Is chatting a waste of time ？
Is chatting a waste of time? Some people say yes to it,but I don’t think so. Here are my views on it.
First and foremost,,in the modern world, we have to communicate with others. Otherwise, we shall be apart from others,or we will be lonely. It's just like a bird living in the forest with others will always be happy.
Besides, by chatting, we can make friends with others. We can exchange our minds with them, or share our happiness and sadness, and we can also make others care of us happily. If you are unhappy,you can chat with someone else and she may help solve your trouble,so you will feel happy again.
Last but not least, nowadays, since most people are very busy, we should try to release ourselves.I find that chatting is one way.Maybe it's just a joke, but it can help us to get rid of the heavy stress of our work.
This is how things stack up at present, I don’t think chatting is a waste of time.Instead we should enjoy it and consider it to useful.

Is chatting a waste of time ？
Is chatting a waste of time? Different people have different opinions. I don’t think chatting is a waste of time. These are my point of view.
First,we living in the modern society, we have to communicate with others. Otherwise, we will be seperated from others, then we will be lonely. Just like a bird, only living in the forest with others, it will be happy.
Second, from chatting, we can make friends with others. We can exchange information, sharing our happiness or sadness with them, also can make the people care about us happy. If you are unhappy, you can chat with someone and she'll help you solve the problem.
Third, nowadays, people around the world are all very busy, so we should try to release tension, chatting is one the ways . Sometimes only a joke can set us free.
Just as what I have said above, I don’t think chatting is a waste of time. We should enjoy it but not consider it as a waste of time.

------"There points can support my opinion"
你是不是打错了? THREE

------"Such as a bird, if only living in the forest with others, it will be happy."

if only表示"要是……就好了" 可以说,
take a bird for example,it won't feel happy unless bing together with other birds.

-------"share our happiness or sadness" 此处用and 比较好,因为是表示并列关系

-------"and also make the people cared about us happy"

首先,people不能用the修饰,the people表示一个民族或种族 而且句子应用一个从句使句子成分清楚正确 and make people who care about us happy

-------"Once you are unhappy, if you can chat with someone and she help you solve the problem, then, you will be happier"
句子层次不清,连接词用的不准.可以说
When you are unhappy, chatting with someone may help you solve your problem and get you a cheerful mood.同一句话中最好不要有重复的单词(happy)出现

-------"can lead us from the heavy stress of work."
lead不跟 from搭配,可以说,can help us get rid of the high working stress 另外,stress已经表示重压,没必要加heavy,如果实在想强调,也要说high

-------'As what I said above"
as listed above

-------"We should only enjoy it but not consider it as a waste of time."
We should just enjoy it instead of considering it as a waste of time

还有文章结构太平,首尾有重复的话,I don’t think chatting is a waste of time. 最好能避免,语言也要注意精彩一些,整体还算可以,思路挺清晰的,难能可贵!~~

我已经尽力了~~~~~~~~~`

and also make the people cared about us happy.
这是什么? 解释一下句子成分