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my families -> my family。这里family是集合名词，表示家庭所有成员
my grandparents' house这里house可以不要
Many of my relations -> Many relatives。下同，relations改成relatives
were played -> were playing
fear -> feared
The first day ... -> On the first day ...，下同，加On
it is very broad这里用wide比较好
had frozen -> had been frozen

Chinglish味道重了些

This is the correct edition:
My Spring Festival
My Spring Festival was great. Before the Chinese New Year, my families were all going to my grandparents’ house. Many of my relatives there were played all the night. At night, we set off firecrackers. The voice was very loud, cars parked far from us were sounding. Maybe they fear the voice too.
The first day of the Chinese New Year, we all got up early. We said “Happy New Year!” or “Good luck this year!” to each other and get money from them. We visited our relations all day. That made me feel very tired but very happy because I also can get money.
The second day of the New Year, I slept during the morning. In the afternoon, I went to the beautiful countryside, and visited the Yi River, it is very broad, about 1 kilometer.
Next day, we left my grandparents’ home for Qingdao. The expressway had frozen. It was terrible! So we could only run by at a slow speed.
This festival was great, I love Spring Festival!

my families were all-->my entire family were
relations->relatives
were played-> enjoyed themselves
the voice was very loud-->they(firecrackers) let out very big noises.
[On] The first day of the Chinese New Year,

and get money from them-->and got gift money from

because I also can get money.
-->because I could get money anyway.

The second day of the New Year, I slept during the morning
-->On the second day of the New Year, I slept through the whole morning.

about 1 kilometer.--> about 1 kilometer in width.
Next day-->On the next day.

The expressway had frozen
--->There was frozen water on the surface of the expressway .

So we could only run by at a slow speed.
-->we had to travel with a low speed.