韩再芬家在青山绿水间:挑错游戏

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In his works, the frontier and the spirit of the frontiersman, which is the spirit of freedom and human connection was gone. In Dreiser’s fiction, the world of jungle, where “kill or to be killed” was the law. The ideal of “survival of the fittest” of Darwin influenced him. there are no judgment, just facts of life. We can find the method of Naturalism in the novel. And his writing style was influence by Balzac, Spence and other great masters.

问题:是否有逻辑错误,是否有语法错误。在哪里,有几处???

Line 1 which is改成that is后加“,” 这里用which的话只能代指到frontiersman,而文中想指的是spirit
Line 2 was gone那里肯定不对,但不知道你想表达什么
第二句话只有the world of jungle这个主语以及修饰主语的从句,其他成分缺失。
Line 3 ideal改称idea
Line 4 there are改成is
Line 5 influence改成influenced
Spence如果你想说斯宾塞的话那应该是Spencer

另外line4的method我觉得不好,应该用view,influence或者belief之类的,毕竟自然主义并无显著的写作方法,只是创作思路的问题。

In his work, the frontier and the spirit of the frontiersmen, which are the spirit of freedom and human connection were gone. In Dreiser’s fiction, the world of jungle, where “kill or to be killed” was the law. The ideal of “survival of the fittest” of Darwin influenced him. There is no judgment, just the facts of the life. We can find the method of Naturalism in the novel. And his writing style was influenced by Balzac, Spence and some other great masters.
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1.frontiersman 2.the world of jungle