婚过来昏过去百度云:帮忙给打一下分,最好指出各自优缺点,谢谢

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My Favourite Newspaper
Being popular with many people,loved by millons of English learners,21st Century has become one of the most Successful English newspapers in China.
It is published in Beijing,once a week.Each one consists on hot news on the week,word of today,language classes,PE&Art and Students'reports.Besides it also has a lot of pictures in it,which makk it more lively and interesting.It not only can be used to improve our English skills and learn new words,but also can be used to acquire all kinds of information.It is really perfect.

My Favourite Newspaper
When I first caught a glimplse of 21st century,I was deeply attracted by it.
21st Century is published in Beijing,one issue s week. The content of the newspaper contains Weekly News,World today,Language study,Sports and Music,and Students reports.
I have been a reader of 21st Century for 3years,and I have to say she is a good teacher for my English.You can learn new sords to enlarge you vocabulary . You can improve your integrade skills in mastering English, You can as well team more imformation of all kinds via 21st Century. What`s more,she is color-printed,so a high quality picture printed in the article will made reders more enthusiastic in reading it.
With its all advantages,it is centain that 21st Century will become more and more popular.

I think the second one may be better.It has more lively word and the whole passage reads smoothly.However at the time you should pay more attention to your sentence.using a variety sentence pattern will make your article more attractive

应该是第二篇比较好,第一篇规规矩矩的,第二篇很生动。第一篇80第二篇95吧

先问一下楼主是什么水准的文章?4级?6级?托福?gre?
应该说4级可以说不错,6级勉强通过,后面2个只能抱歉了,差距太大了