高校问答海南哪里有游乐场:请英语高手指点
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The first Olympic Games date back to the year 776BC in Greece. Till now, thousands of years has passed, the Olympic Games is still on. Disasters, wars both can’t stop its step; power, unwisdom both can’t change its direction.
Olympic, the sacred event belongs to the whole world, it just like a string, holds all of us together, firmly. Different colors of skin, different races, different languages, different customs, there is not even one force can be as strong as the spirit of Olympic, why? There is only one reason; we all have a same dream, a dream of the Olympics----Peaceful, harmony and United.
The dream has existed for many years. And now, the Olympic torch will come to China and the fire of Olympic will burn on the ground of China! The dream of Olympic will stay in the sky of Beijing, China!
Beijing, the capital city of China, will be the hero of the dream 2008 Olympic Games. All the people around the world with have the special dream! And Nanjing may will be one of the main gymnasiums then.
As the hero of the dream, what can we do?
The Olympics not only bring us exciting matches, but also bring us a variety of education resources and opportunities. We must hold the treasure opportunities and resources to do as much effort as we can to make the Olympics in Beijing 2008 successfully. What I want to say is something that every one of us can do.
First of all, we can carry on the Olympics education in schools. Boys and girls would be easy to accept something new; we must let them know the spirits and ideas of the Olympics.
And then we should spread knowledge on the Olympics to the whole society through Newspaper, TV, radio and the Internet. Try to launch all the citizens to pay attention to the 2008 Beijing Olympics and play an active role so that the whole city will have one dream, the whole nation will have one dream, and the whole world will have one dream.
One world, one dream, let’s hold up our hands to make the dream a wonderful and exciting one!
以上是我预备参加英语演讲比赛的演讲稿，主题是围绕奥运会（2008北京奥运会），希望高手给出知道意见。
给你修改了一下,写的内容还是不错的,不过我怀疑是对照中文一句句翻译的,太多中国式的表达了. 注意时态和主谓一致的错误,很不错的文章. 我的能力有限.
One World One Dream
The first Olympic Games date(时态) back to the year 776BC in Greece. Till now, thousands of years has(时态) passed, the Olympic Games is still on. Disasters, wars both(both xx and xx) can’t stop its step(复数); power, unwisdom both can’t change its direction.
Olympic, the sacred event belongs to the whole world, it(去掉it) just like a string, holds(holding,其实不如用put,我没见过hold together这个用法) all of us together, firmly. Different colors of skin, different races, different languages, different customs, there is not even one(there is no句式比较好) force can be as strong as the spirit of Olympic, why? There is only one reason; we all have a same dream, a dream of the Olympics----Peaceful, harmony and United.
The dream has existed (为什么不用be kept,exist这个词小心点用)for many years. And now, the Olympic torch will come to China and the fire of Olympic will burn on the ground of China!(火炬已经到中国了) The dream of Olympic will stay in the sky of Beijing, China!
Beijing, the capital city(去掉city) of China, will be the hero of the dream 2008 Olympic Games. All the(去掉the) people around the world with(这里怎么出来个with) have the special dream! And Nanjing may will be one of the main gymnasiums then.(这句话不通啊?may和will怎么连用,另外南京怎么会是体育馆?)
As the hero of the dream, what can we do? (上面说北京是hero of the dream了,所以这里主语不应该是we)
The Olympics not only bring(加s) us exciting matches, but also bring us a variety of education resources and opportunities. We must hold the treasure opportunities and resources to do as much effort as we can to make the Olympics in Beijing 2008 successfully. What I want to say is something that every one of us can do.
First of all, we can carry on the Olympics education in schools. Boys and girls would be easy to accept something new; we must let them know the spirits and ideas of the Olympics.
And then we should spread knowledge on the Olympics to the whole society through Newspaper, TV, radio and the Internet. Try to launch all the citizens to pay attention to the 2008 Beijing Olympics and play an active role so that the whole city will have one dream, the whole nation will have one dream, and the whole world will have one dream.
One world, one dream, let’s hold up our hands to make the dream (加to be) a wonderful and exciting one!
你是个中学生吧，不错!
不错,不错,真不错！Very good!