高校问答苏州欧蓓莎起诉:帮忙修改一下：）
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I've got the International Students Admissions Exercise Application form from Your school website, and I have intensive interest in TP.But I can't provide my TOFEL score before 31 Nov's06 as I'll take part in TOFEL examination in November 06.Could I send my application to you before Dealine,and then send my TOFEL later?
I would be most grateful if it be accepted. I am looking forward to your early reply.Thank you.
Best regards.
Yours sincerely,
taoyiyi
要点就是：你们的申请截止日期是15 Oct’06，但是我最早将参加06年11月的托福考试。我可不可以在截止日期之前把申请表寄给你们，然后在11月份提供托福成绩？
我知道我写得很烂，如果哪位强人帮忙重写一下，我给您追加80分（我就这些了：P
我发现了两处明显错误
1 .
Could I send my application to you before Dealine,and then send my TOFEL later? 这句中
“Dealine”应该改为the deadline（最终期限）
“，”也可以去掉
2.I would be most grateful if it be accepted.
"if it be "改为"if it is"
纠正楼上的回答者一个地方：
“ I have intensive "interested" in ”中的“Interest”不用改为“interest”，因为Intensive只是形容词来修饰interest的
“But I can't provide my TOFEL score before 31 Nov's06 as I'll take part in TOFEL examination in November 06.”中的Before最好改为Until比较符合国外的习惯
“I would be "very" grateful ”中的Most不用改为Very也是非常好的
Dear Sir or Madam,
I've got the International Students Admissions Exercise Application form from Your school website, and I have intensive "interested" in TP.But I can't provide my TOFEL score before 31 Nov's06 as I'll take part in TOFEL examination in November 06.Could I send my application to you before Dealine,and then send my TOFEL later?
I would be "very" grateful if it "can" be accepted. I am looking forward to your "earlier" reply.
"Thanks with best regards"
taoyiyi
引号的内容是我改的地方. 你写的意思可以清楚表达.