因为是你爱情短句:这段英语有什么错误吗？

大写的是改动过的
This is what happened to a Frenchman, WHO(这里需要一个词指代前面的人) lived in England and didn’t know ENGLISH(明显这里少谓语) very good. One day he went to a post office with his letter. He bought a stamp and GAVE(前面用bought所以这里是过去时) it together with his letter to the girl on the counter. The girl told the man he must stick the stamp on HIMSEFT(这里明显是用第三人称). The man was very surprised. He could not believe his ear. He asked the girl WHY(这里明显是因果关系) he must stick the stamp on himself. The girl said that SHE(这里是是售货员的话所以是she) meant that he must stick the stamp on the envelop and must do IT(代表这件事情不用them) himself.

This is what happened to a Frenchman who lived in England and didn’t know English very good.

This is what happened to a Frenchman, WHO lived in England and didn’t know ENGLISH very WELL. One day he went to a post office with his letter. He bought a stamp and gAve it together with his letter to the girl AT the counter. The girl told the man he must stick the stamp on HIMSELF. The man was very surprised. He could not believe his earS. He asked the girl WHY he must stick the stamp on himself. The girl said that She meant that he must stick the stamp on the envelop and must do IT himself.