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south pole is very beautiful.even though there are not many flowers and trees,i like it very much .because they are white anyway.there are many penguins．they looks very lovely.people can't live there for a long time because it is bitterly cold there.I think I will try to live there when I grow up~~
Here 企鸸 should be 企鹅

because it's white anyway.there are many 企鸸s

because there are white anyway. 这里anyway我觉得你应该是anywhere.

\"because there are white anyway.there are many 企鸸．they are very lovely.people can\'t live there for a long time.\"

1.i think \"anyway\" should be \"everywhere\"
then

2.it is better to use some conj. to connect the sentences.

south pole is very beautiful.even though there are not many flowers and trees,i like it very much __since there are white everywhere and particularly many penguins can be found in south pole.because of the bitterly cold climate,people can\'t live there for a long time .I think I will try to live there when I grow up~~

个人觉得 你的文章 不是很有条理
写之前 还是应该确定一下写作的中心和重点~~~

Even though there aren\'t much （1） flowers and trees,the South Pole （2）is still very beautiful,.I like it very much ,because （3）it is white everywhere.There are many （4）penguins．They are very lovely. (5) It is too cold to people to live there.I think i will try to live there when i grow up~~

(你长大想当爱斯基摩人吗？)
1 many在否定的时候要改成much，南极不是没有很多花草，是根本就没有。
2 the,南极是指专有地名，所以前面要加冠词。
3 there is/are是说有什么东西，表示存在。这里你是要说那里到处都是白色的，是说“它是怎么样的地方”。用it is.anyway 是无论如何，总之的意思。
4 企鹅 penguin
5 这里你是要说南极太冷，而人们不能在上面久住。可以用too...to来表达，它是说太怎么样而不能怎样。太冷而不能居住。

because there are white anyway.
(because it is white anywhere.)