梦三国张辽怎么玩:请大家帮我修改一下这些英语表述！

第一句Why do you choose our institute?就可以了，不用加study。
First,I strongly want to have a further study because after four years’ work,I realize that my knowledge is out of the time and not available for daily work.I must keep on studying to adapt the present society.So I decide to attend the Entrance Examanation of Postgraduate.
Second,in my opinion,Beijing Language and Culture University is good.She has nice campus , many high-level postgraduate tutors and many significant research tasks. All these aspects attract me to enter the university for further study.I believe I can greatly improve myself after three years’ study.
Thirdly, I learnt a lot from my job during the past four years. However, I think further study is still urgent for me to discover the self-value. Life is precious. It is necessary to cherish every chance for self-development, especially in this competitive modern world. In a word, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.

2.Why do you want to study in university instead of going on working?
I learnt a lot from my job during the past four years. But my foundation is not steady, and if I don’t improve myself by further studying now, I will fall behind in the future work. Therefore, I think further study is urgent for me. Life is precious. It is necessary to cherish every chance for self-development, especially in this competitive modern world. In a word, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.

3.Do you have any future plans of the achivements during your study if you are enrolled into this institute?
If I’m so luckily to be enrolled into Beijing Language and Culture University,I will cherish the chance .My plan is: First, I hope I can form systematic view of Classical Chinese Literature. My express wish is to get a complete comprehension of the formation and development of the subject. If possible, I will go on with my study for doctor's degree.As for English study,I will pay more attention to my oral English.I will communicate with foreign friends to improve my English .最后这句I will try to learn decent English.我认为去掉较好。很有中国人说话的味道，其实之前你已经表达的很清楚了。
基本就是这样了，改了一些，不知道是不是违了你原来的意思，请仔细看一下。

以下我加了一些我的建议，当然我想the survival of the fittest 是一个很好用的词组~~达尔文的社会淘汰观念~看起来有深度
顺便一问：是Entrance <Examanation> of Postgraduate
还是 〈Examination> 这可不能错！太不诚心了！
There are several factors that attract me to study in this institute.
First of all, I strongly want to study further after four years of work, because I have felt that my knowledge has been out dated, however the society is advancing rapidly. In order for me to adapt the principle of
the survival of the fittest in the society, I decide to attend the Entrance Examanation of Postgraduate to acquire more knowledge and skills.

1.Why did you choose to study at our institute?
There are several reasons.
Firstlyb,I have strong desire to study further ,because after four years’ working experience,I find that my knowledge has been out of date,and not enough any more,I must keep on studying to adapt myself to the demand of the society.So I decide to take part in the Entrance Examanation of Postgraduate.
Secondly,Beijing Language and Culture University is a very distinguished school.There is a nice environment, many high-level postgraduate tutors and many significant research tasks. All these facts are attracting me to enter the university for further education.I believe I can greatly improve myself after three years’ study here.
Finally, although I have learnt a lot from my job during the past four years,I still think further study is necessary ,for which I can realize myself-value much better. Life is limited ,and it is very important to seize any chance of self-development, especially in this competitive modern society. In a word, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.

2.Why do you want to go back to study instead of going on with your work?
I have learnt a lot from my job for the past four years. But my foundation is still fairly weak, and if I don’t enhance my knowledge now, I will definitely fall behind the society in future. So, I think further study is a must for me. Life is precious and quite limited,so it is very important for us to seize any chance of self-development, especially in this competitive modern society. In a word, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’ study here.

3.What do you expect to achieve during your study if you are enrolled into this institute?
If I’m lucky enough to be enrolled into Beijing Language and Culture University,I will cherish this opportunity very much.My plan is: First, I hope I can form systematic view of Classical Chinese Literature,and get a complete comprehension of the formation and development of the subject. If possible, I will go on with my study towards doctorate degree.For English study,I will pay more attention to my oral English.I will communicate with foreign friends to improve it,and try to learn standard English.

我先给你改改第一段
1.Why do you choose to study at our institute?
Out of certain needs and reasons I would like to study at your institute.
Firstly, after 4 years of work, I strongly feel the need and urge to update and enhance my knowledge and skills, as to adapt to the ever changing work requirement. This is the major reason I decide to take part in the Entrance Examanation of Postgraduate.

Secondly,Beijing Language and Culture University has much to offer. It provides amicable campus environment, strong academic team and significant research results. I find these strengths of the university very conducive for further study.

Thirdly, I have gained much experience from my job in the past four years. However, I realise that, further study would help me further actualise myself. It is necessary to seize any chance for self-development, especially in this competitive modern world. In a nutshell, I am looking forward to making a solid foundation for future profession after three years’study here.

chinglish enough.